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Question: A poem from a while back!. Rewritten, please give advice!.!?
"closed eyes"


A recurring dream, I'm holding you,
beneath the moon, a crimson hue!.
This picture of the world now lost,
the end is near, a holocaust!.

Together through an endless night,
the moon provides just frozen light!.
A secret held behind closed eyes,
I yearn to share, yet still she cries!.

Remembering your poison scent,
all our kisses gently spent!.
If only we could understand,
the moon, the beach, the crystal sand!.

Listen to your ancestral heart,
midnights hour has yet to start!.
Within the cold and ghastly night,
born to kill, I have to fight!.

Through the dark, no speck of light,
hold you close, with all my might!.
We spilled our blood, a sacrifice,
Satan's laugh, I dropped the knife!.

SOLILOQUY

A final dream of holding you,
we are lost, no longer two!.
Beneath this frozen winter sky,
my penultimate question!.!.!.why!?Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
my tears are the tribute i can only send you for your words full of reality and emotion !.!.!.i love u my friend!.Woman is lucky for whom you write so good!.!Www@QuestionHome@Com

beautiful!. amazing rhythmn!. perfect!. i cant think of anything you could do to improve it!. this poem is magical it brought a tear to my eye!. it really makes you think!. wow!. im in awe right now! you have amazing talent!.!.!.please continue to write and share your work you are something specialWww@QuestionHome@Com

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Just!.!.!. stop!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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