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Question: Does Part VIII contain enough Mystery and intrigue!?
-Sin Seeker_
*Part VIII
The rain beat harder as I fled!.
He ushered me to leave with hast!.
Crashing waves of guilt
regret
resignation to my race!.
The darkening world about me wailed
as if Hell would block my path!.
but through the cascade, on foot I sailed,
fearing hound of Royal Wrath!.
The Map!
I feared would be destroyed,
its paper pallet soaked with tears!.
But my worry, rendered void
when I saw taws’ crisp and clear!.
In the distance, morning dawned,
its brightening beams pierced the surge!.
And so, heart low, I carried on,
servant to an unknown urge
and wondering did fill my mind
of what
or who
this Miir could be!.
But knowing all too soon I’d find
at end of road
what awaited me-
I hope you all like this one!.!.!. they each have a different sound I've found (oops, poet and wasn't awear!.!.)!. This is one of my own favorites!.!.!. what do you guys think!?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Yes, there is plenty of suspense in this one!. We are on the journey with you to!.!.!.where!? And we still need to discover who or what "Miir" could be!. I love that it flows and rhymes so well!. It only adds to the beauty of the poem!. I love the lines:
"The darkening world around me wailed
as if Hell would block my path
but through the cascade, on foot I sailed
fearing hound of royal Wrath!."
There are certainly intrigue and mystery in those well chosen words!. This is superb!. Thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
IIIIIIInteresting!. So, where does it go from here!. Already nature seeks to destroy the bearer of the map, what other earthly elements will assail our questing hero/heroine!? The rhythm of this is smooth and rolicking, with random pitfalls that one would expect, trying to find their way in the storm!. Just remember, while the road to the Miir is long, reflection can be see from afar off!. Hook your audience, then lead them quickly to a resolution!. Looking forward to part Nine!. You know I have a thing for nines!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I really, really like it!. I think it is beautiful and mysterious!. It is the sort of poem that leaves the reader wondering!. It is Perfect!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I have decided that it is now your turn to suffer in eager anticipation of my piercingly brilliant critiques, at least until after the next part!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Wow this is really great Siren as they all are ' but yes this is really fantastic and smooth!.!.You really should do a book of poetry and a nice story as one paragraph' we would be hooked!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its maddd nice !. i love it !Www@QuestionHome@Com