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Question: My poem=)) rate!?
for school i had to write a poem in a girl and a guys perspective so this is the one in the girls perspective
its not finished!.!.!.!. this is a rough draft just rate it and tell me what you think
There is love
in your presence
I just know it
Your heart says it
When you stare
Into my eyes
The loves there
Right in sight
It is there
When you tell me
Im beautiful
Or today I look pretty
It's there when you
wrap your arms around me
It is so true
My hearts free
Love is near
Your kiss is true
And when you whisper
"I love you"Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
the last 2 Passages are brilliant !. the previous 3 need some work !. Bring the reader into the First passage !. It is kind of boring , at first !. A little to , repeated !. The whole piece is good , yet , I would like a better beginning !. Let me know why !? !.!.!.That "I LOVE YOU " !.!.!.!.Am not shooting you down , this is good , !.!.!.!.!.!.!.Where are you taking me !.!.!.!?!?!?!? I would rate this a !.!.!.!.9 !.Www@QuestionHome@Com
sorry!. I don't like it!.
what is love, what does it look like, how does it work, what's it doing!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Definitely in a preppy high school girls perspective!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's pretty good, but I feel like you could make it a lot better!. When I read it it feels like every part is just thrown in it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like it!Www@QuestionHome@Com