Is this poem any good and if it suck canu tell me how to make it better?

Question: Is this poem any good and if it suck canu tell me how to make it better!?

Sitting on the edge
just wanting to die
Nobody Cares
I dont know why

Without a look
they look away
like im invisble
without a say

In my head
im screaming out
nobody heres me
crying out

not even knowing
im on the edge
looking over
trying to find
find the reason
IM ALIVE

then i think
of the day
i met you
and turn away

away from the edge
i despise
now knowing
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

This is a poem, which brings in slight sadness!. It is a very sweet love tht saves the poet eventually!. I believe the stuff is good, with careful revision in form and rhyme it will become a become a beautiful garland of lyricism!. There is a touch of ramanticisma nd even mysticism!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm pretty sure you have the way to read this poem set in your mind, but it's not standing out to me!. It seems choppy; it doesn't flow in a rhythmical way!. The words are great (it seems like you do try a little too hard to rhyme at one point) and the idea clearly comes across, but the natural flow isn't there!. It should have something of a cadence :
example:
The cat on the tin roof
Slept so quietly
Through the clapping of hoofs
And the birds loud melody!.
Hope I Helped!
-EEWww@QuestionHome@Com

i like it
it's sweetWww@QuestionHome@Com

its awesome!. did u wrote it by your self!?Www@QuestionHome@Com