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Question: Im going to enter this in a contest(picture inspired) please comment on it!?
Are you scared,my love,but this is where I live
Above is my sinful nightmare,and below my awakedness
That twinkling dot is not a star,its my flaming, diminishing soul

Do you see the full moon haunted by hovering dark clouds
It has ever seemed so near,while it never was
I have been pining for it,for I see you there
This old bridge is now in ruins by rainstorms and hurricanes
Forgive me, my darling if it terrorises your tender heart
I promise you seasons of springs
I promise little pegions in the place of those bats
I promise you sunlight blue skies and happy rainbows
This bridge may be in ruins today,
Give me your strength,let me build an island,an empire here
Stay here with me,my sweet love
Make me breathe again!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


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