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Question: Read my other poem!? tell me what you think!?
okay i wrote this poem as a song a year ago after i found out my cousin was pregnant at sixteen!. she was kinda my rolemodle so just tell me what you think!.
She looks around
has no clue
her lifes screwed up
all teared and chewed
At such a young age what is she to do!?
if only someone would've given her a clue
Her head is hurtin'
eyes are burnin'
she's cried the whole night long
if he told her he loved her, then where is he now
i guess they never really belonged
she ain't got the flu
in reality
she's got!.!.!.teenage pregnancy
is it good!? if you heard the music i wrote to it, it's great!. theres more to it, but the rest wasn't as much from the heart!. i write poems when i'm going through something sad!. "/
well i hope it was worth your time!. (:Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
HAHAH YESSSSSSSSSSSS!!!!!1
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it has a lack of meter and well i dont think it has a good scheme you see i bet it would make a good song buty not so much just a poem!. and to make it better to read put "At such a young age" as its own line!.i like it but is does need some workWww@QuestionHome@Com
sorry dont like it!.!. you used baby words and it didnt even rhyme or sound good!.!.i know not all poems need to rhyme but ur choice of words really dissappointed me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love sad poems they inspire me
I love this one :):(Www@QuestionHome@Com
I loved it, it was beautiful and heartfelt!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
it is really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
really good!! i like it alot!.!.!.as for you!.!.!.im worried!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
i like itWww@QuestionHome@Com