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Question: Daughter to Father poem!.!.!.what do think about the poem(no i won't show this to my father)!?
this is an older poem i wrote!.!.!.!.like last year!.!.it has a couple of song references!.!.

Title: Tell me who are you suppose to be!?

I’m trying to drown this sound
But the drones are just too loud
I hate feeling this pain
And if I may
Let me fade away,
Because theirs nothing to gain

I keep telling myself it’s your entire FAULT
But through it all, I always find a way
to blame myself
I just want that feeling to stop
And what’s the point of caring,
when you don’t care your self

It’s just not fair
Why is it that when you see me, I’m nothing but a stranger!?
After all this time
How can you not see the real me
Who am I suppose to run to when I feel danger

Tell me now!
Who are you suppose to be!?

I’m trying to drown this sound
But the drones are just too loud
I hate feeling this pain
And If I may!.!.!.
Let me fade away
Because theirs nothing to gain

I don’t want to feel the thing’s that you do
Give me a reason to believe in you
I’m trying and I’m falling
Grasping to find something to hold on to
And even though I’m alive I feel buried inside


And I’m beating myself up now
These thoughts go deep inside my skin
I don’t want to feel this rage
But every time I give you a chance
I fall on my face
This is why I can’t trust you

Tell me now!
Who are you suppose to be!?

I’m trying to drown this sound
But the drones are just too loud
I hate feeling this pain
And If I may
let me fade away, because theirs nothing to gain

I’m invisible now
and if you see me please just walk on by
Cuz apparently I’m never there
And you never knew me at all
And now I won’t fall, after all
Don’t worry I’ll be okay

I’m telling you now
This is who I am!

I’m trying to drown this sound
And the drones become lucid
And through it all I'll find some other wayWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Wow!. I can relate to this alot, I totally love it!. It's really raw and descriptive!.!.!.you can kind of feel it, if that makes any sense!. :)
I really love the lines 'And I’m beating myself up now
These thoughts go deep inside my skin' and 'I’m trying to drown this sound
And the drones become lucid
And through it all I'll find some other way'
:) 10/10Www@QuestionHome@Com

Despite a few spelling errors it is really good!.
It flows well for the most part!. There are a couple places it seems to stall but if it is a song maybe with melody it would flow better in those places!.
I really like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I agree,
it's more of a song!.
Nice:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Fantastic :-DWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is amazingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, OMG that is very good!Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is really goodWww@QuestionHome@Com

oh,it was good!!!
u'll be a good poet!i loved the sad words in ur poem!!Www@QuestionHome@Com