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Question: Tell me what you think about this poem i wrote during my tour in Iraq!?
House of Sand

Walking down this sand driven road
With my weapon slung over my shoulder
And a prayer lifting in my mind
That Persian fire begins to die
And slumber beneath the desert
While in the distance an eerie hymn is sung
As night brings shadows across this ancient land
Bringing one less day in this house of sand

Rundown shacks and women wearing black
Paint the horizon where
The flying man tries to take flight
Wondering where freedom can be found
But gunshots from the Iris keep him down
Though in the distance a lake of lost souls
Shackles the lion that roars no more
For he has become old and tore
His legend and tyrant hand
No longer hold the house of sand

No difference between night and day
When home is so far away
And time is your only friend
Not knowing when the end will begin
Watching palm trees sway in the wind
Reminds me that all will be forgiven
When peace conquers this land
And brings down the house of sandWww@QuestionHome@Com


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Thank you for sharing!.!.!.it's wonderful!. I wish all the men and women who wrote poems while serving in the military could compile them into one book!. I'd be the first to buy it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Fantastic! You have a real talent!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!.!.!.!. you've got a real talent!. You should pursue writing poetry!Www@QuestionHome@Com