A new write but, can you tell me if you got the "Meta"?

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Crazy Drive

P, p, p, passin’ in the break down lane
Foot heavy to the floor
AC cranked up ta freezin’
Desperation ta explore

Feeble minded personalities
Tsunamis in my head
Pushin’ 80 miles an hour
Pushin’ life or callin’ death

F*ck all you now, monstrosities!
To ail me such as this!!?
Those walked me closer, ever closer
Till I step right off that cliff!.

F, f, f, free flowin’ breezes
YA! My pedals through the floor!
Passin’ innocent by drivers
Flyin’ 95 or more

Sirens wail a light show glow
In rearview, ha, ha (too slow)
Tsunamis got some room ta grow
Fecal people I sadly know

A SLAM! The radiators blown!
Hot steam slithers in to me
As I’m passin’ in the break down lane
With thoughts of “used ta bes’”

Ma clutch is jammed! F*ck all the damned!
You know, I’m always movin’ on
Sirens are close, tsunami wails
A dead end road I travel long

Harsh winds screamin’ past 100
Light show glows a maple tree
I spark a Marlboro, take it in
As I let go the steerin’ wheel!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I would like your permission to put that to music!.!.!.

Lyrics by YOU, of course!.!.!.

Melody by me!.!.!.

It "cries out to be sung!.!.!." (unless you already have a music rhythm to it, pardon me for being presumptuous!.!.!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Interesting poem!.!.!.tree and wheel don't rhyme!.!.!.not even as slant rhymes because it comes at the end of the poem and fails to provide closure!.!.!.easy to fix if you want to though!. "used ta bes" should be hypenated, the rest of the vernacular is consistant though!. This will probably appeal to a smaller audience, but it has a raw "in your face" appeal to it that is unmistakable!.

not a bad write!.!.!.keep writingWww@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, Shad! You're telling it like it is tonight! That is slammin' for sure!. You could always say "Set that steerin' wheel free!.!.!.!." if you wanted, or leave it!. Just cause! I'll have to read this one again to take it all in!. Thanks for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I can see that you're getting into SLAM!!.!.!.very cool!. Good rhythm!.!.!.Good flow!.!.!.nice spoken word material!.

Fecal people!.!.!.excellent!.
Last three stanzas are the strongest for me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this one!.
Said it like it is!.
Nice work:)Www@QuestionHome@Com