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Question: Is this a good sonnet for LA!?
"Oh no, it is that time of year again
the dreadful end that colors the world black
Once more again we are forced to pen
A thing so hated many started smokin crack
Forone month long we must endure this pain
A whole month long before we can summer
A whole month wasted with nothing to gain
A whole month of life becomes a bummer
A hint of confusion graces the air
As many men struggle to sort their thoughts
And I have had it now, I cannot bear
The attempts at suicide that come to thought
I wish I could fly away from this planet
Lifes not worth livin if writing a sonnet!."
This is just something I scraped up to pick up some Extra Credit in my LA class!. Any suggestions are welcome, actually they're requested!. ThanksWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Well, the rhyme pattern is correct!.!.!.it's not in iambic pentameter (some is, some isn't), but it meets the basic requirements!. I'd give it a "C" if I were grading it!.!.!.here's a suggested edit:
Oh, no! It is that time of year again
That dreadful end that hues the world to black
Once more again we forced the weary pen
A thing so vile it makes wish we had some crack
For one month more we must endure this pain
For one month more before we find the Summer
A whole month wasted with only grades to gain
A whole month thinking life's just one big bummer
Confusion's hint does grace the very air
As many struggle hard to sort their knots
But I have had it now! I cannot bear
The varied ways of suicide that come to thoughts
In truth I'd spend not one more moment on it
Life's not worth living if I must write a sonnet
!.!.!.!.just a suggestion to make it comply with the iambic pentameter form expected of a sonnet!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
yes, it is!Www@QuestionHome@Com