Position:Home>Poetry> An edit on a poem i did a few days ago please comment it?

what do you think!?
i need a name as well something magical, any ideas!?

My golden moon once was our relic
shone down a gleaming charm on silver lined sky,
her years of glory, eclipsing, rotating, waiting,
though shortening, shattering, soon to die!.
Lay bear on a hillside enrich the deepest darks
mirrored on a shattered lake of glass,
brouden the night congress among stars!.
Willow trees weep to a waters edge
a dozen brown moths flutter beyond,
golden dust falls by leaves a moths chosen path
our full moon beauty mysteriously bound!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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