What do you think of this short piece?

Question: What do you think of this short piece!?

Mother and Father

Spring defends against
winter causes dreams of
flowers cover graves of
parents leave the fondest
memories!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I think you are doing a repetitive "wrap" on your lines like - "Spring defends against !.!.!. winter" - (again) "Winter causes dreams of !.!.!. flowers" etc!. The meaning is nice but the format is a little tricky to read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Puzzled!.

Spring defends against
winter causes dreams of
flower covered graves of
parents leaves the fondest
memories!.

This version makes more sense - but would be better punctuated!.

Spring defends against
winter, causes dreams of
flower covered graves of
parents!. Leaves the fondest
memories!.

I don't like the two consecutive 'of' endings!.
And Spring would have to be here first for it to be defending itself against Winter's attack - you have it the wrong way around!.

Back to the drawing board, as they say!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It is not one of your better poems!.

Spring defends against ------------ what
winter causes dreams of ---------- what
flowers cover graves of -- this is the only question with an
parents leave the fondest -- answer !.!.!.!.
memories!. --- Ultimately this is the point of the poem

Rewrite and repost -- would love to see your newer version!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Love it! Very creative and unique! :-D did you write it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

umm thats kinda shitty!.!.!. sorry you askedWww@QuestionHome@Com

no offense, but it is bad!. you asked!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I don't understand it,
which is a good thing! lol
its great!.Www@QuestionHome@Com