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Question: How can improve this poem!?!?
How can I run away
From all hollow desires
That I have to face
My passions burn more then a thousand fires
I am constrained within a forest
The trees will not let me go through
I'm stuck in a centrifugal motion and I am like a tourist
Who has no idea where to go
And has to go in circles
I see repeating patterns
That's how I know that we cannot be
In each others arms
I see the sign that show me what can happen
In the later days and how much harm
Can be produced with these horrid things, that's why
I cannot do anything!.

There is no cure for fear, there isn't a
Vaccine, that will destroy the virus that's within and
I don't believe that you will
Understand, and help me with this disease,
Because even the people that I am close with
Cannot ease and appease!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
this poem needs no improvement, you should used more commas though oh and the part about " im stuck ina centrifugal motion and i'm like a tourist" just fix right there!. "im stuck in a centrifugal moment, like a tourist with no where to go and has to go in circles!.!.!.!.!.!.!.!. hope i helpedWww@QuestionHome@Com

Puncution is need and maybe some minor mistakes but other then that it is a very good poem!. The details described are the main part of this poem that make it interesting that your have shown!. :)>-Www@QuestionHome@Com