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Question: What do you think of this poem!?Any criticism is welcome!.!?
"How can I run away
From all hollow desires
That I have to face
My passions burn more then a thousand fires
I am constrained within a forest
The trees will not let me go through
I'm stuck in a centrifugal motion and I am like a tourist
Who has no idea where to go
And has to go in circles
I see repeating patterns
That's how I know that we cannot be
In each others arms
I see the sign that show me what ca happen
In the later days and how much harm
Can be produced with these horrid thing, that's why
I cannot do anything!.

There is no cure for fear, there isn't a
Vaccine, that will destroy the virus that's within and
I don't believe that you will
Understand, and help me with this disease,
Because even the people that I am close with
Cannot ease and appease!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I like the second but not the first!. The first one's main idea kind of wanders about, stick to one topic :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

sounds too real!. I am so sorry;but maybe someone will read
this poem and connect or better yet abstain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

great poem!Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow thats good i like it a lotWww@QuestionHome@Com