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by Elaine P Dedicated to a pain in virtual space!. Oh so dark a black hole is drawing me into its huge maw pulling my sore body causing me eternal pain in cold dark seventh ring of Hell!. I scream mindless, writhing agony abandoned here without a pen to write!.Www@QuestionHome@Com Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Oh its dark dirge like yes Elaine, no pen Alas, who will save!? Poets, bards with habits pen, paper, inkwell also they must purge all mental anguish muses command so much tender care only then will salvation show its way so please, please fedex Elaine some pens now Sorry, couldn't resist!. Fed Ex does though need your Martian address!.Www@QuestionHome@Com To be stuck in the cold and dark in that seventh ring of hell without a pen to write your words upon your paper then write your words into the sand and you can use your finger for a pen He says: Best I can do without looking, but I had to try!. I loved yours!. It would really be hell to not be able to write!. If I were to finish it in reverse, would it be an EthereeeerehtE!? btw, the patch comes off today at 4 pm!. my fingers are crossed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com The form itself speaks of the theme!. and I love this one Elaine!.!.!.it's about pain and I am trying to fly away from it!. "Not charioted by Bacchus and his pards, But on the viewless wings of Poesy" (John Keats, Ode to a Nightingale)Www@QuestionHome@Com I think It`s very good Elaine!. But you could get some tips from the DARK PRINCE!. I don`t know If you read he stuff but It`s very DARK!. Does that sound ok to you!? I don`t know eighter one of you!. It`s just a suggestion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I had to research etheree!. Again, you've taught me something new!. This poem is full of pain and torture!. Yes, indeed, it is a dark poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com I feel the pain I wonder will it end can I recover ~~Www@QuestionHome@Com Its easy!. Just hang out with goths (like me) and it will easly come to you!. trust me, it will!.Www@QuestionHome@Com hi- try to look to the life from other perspective and write another poem !. good luckWww@QuestionHome@Com Every cliche in the dark book!.!.!.!.you couldn't have done it better!.Www@QuestionHome@Com |