I think this one needs a little more, any suggestions?

Question: I think this one needs a little more, any suggestions!?

Meditation

For just a moment there is no time
Blank
White wall
All motion stops, all thought too
I float in a perfect state
Sublime,
And afterward
There are no longer unclimbable mountains
Just glorious hills and vistas
And inside, no longer without direction
Now with peace I can live my life in calm and simplicity!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

More, in what sense!? More examples of how meditation changes possibilities into certainties for you, or more on what meditation is!?

I'm not sure in either case!.!.!.!.the poem is simple and straightforward and is perfectly fine as it is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Okay!.!.!.!.!.
1!.!.!.!.!.a moment of no Time
4!.!.!.!.!.Motion, thought, stops
5!.!.!.!.!.I float
7!.!.!.!.!.Afterward
8!.!.!.!.!.No mountain challenge
9!.!.!.!.!.Hills, vistas
10!.!.!.Direction inside
11!.!.!.Calm, simple, peace!.!.!.!.life!.

I just took out a few things!.!.!.it has the same meaning as before!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think you need a little bit more about meditation within the actual poem itself because without reading the title I thought it was about drugs but then again maybe thats what you were looking for!?

Apart from that I think it's fineWww@QuestionHome@Com

Consider the word "Unclimbable" and see if you can find a replacement; perhaps "no longer unreachable heights"

I like the poem;

You have a quiet, content ending that fits the poem well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Seems rather simplistic!. I will have to meditate!. I usually see dancing lights in my state!. Of course I am perhaps somewhat bias!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it too!. Torit has a good suggestion!. I can't add anything to that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

It's Fine!.Www@QuestionHome@Com