Pls. rate my poem?

Question: Pls!. rate my poem!?

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"I am here with you"

I am here!.!.
Can you see me!?
I am beside you
Can you feel me!?

I miss the days when you used to know me
I miss the times when you were with me

I'm here talking to you
Can you hear me!?
I'm here in front of you
Do you recognize me!?

I'm still here for you
Even if you don't notice me anymore!.
I'm still here caring for you
Even if you don't care at all!.

I'm still here loving you
Even if you don't love me back!.
I'm still here for you
Even if you don't know!.

I will still be here for you
When you remember me again!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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that's awsome ! i was touched !!.!.!.!.a perfect 10 for me!.!.!.!.!.i'd love u to post some more later on!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Keep Walking !Www@QuestionHome@Com

I really like it!. Kinda sounds like the speaker is talking to a friend who maybe has become popular and forgotten the speaker exsists but the speaker knows that this friend will come back and remember him b/c popularity only last so long!. I have been through things like that before and could relate!. Or it could be the speaker is talking to a loved one who has forgotten the speaker!. Anyways great job and keep up the good work!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes I like it, although it is a little predictable!.

You have really thought it over well and included a good range of senses, but the framework is a little too traditional for my liking!.

Try to be outrageous and original!. Be daring and use more powerful words-try to express desperation and pain!.!.

Otherwise I liked it!. It is simple to read and leads the reader into thinking of the type of relationship being described and what may have happened!.

Are they related or seperated lovers etc!.!.!.

7/10Www@QuestionHome@Com

I will be really honest with you!. Language can never be the barrier!. The good thing about your poetry is that you are extremely clear with what you want to project!.
Just work a little on how to make it look interesting and add on a little facets to it so that anybody who reads your poetry can relate to it!.

P!.S!. I am a poet myself with the pen name as " once mortal"!.

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It's a nice idea and you used a lot of repetitive schemes which is important in poetry but you don't have a real scheme!.!.!.!.technically I'm not sure it's a poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

you got talent gurl that would be probley either a pome to a boyfriend form his gurl friend are a poem to god are maybe a poem to her daughter!. but keep up your talents i think they might end up in a card!. keep the good work gurlWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's quite good!. Follows a particular pattern and feels complete!. Very good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I would give it an 8 or 9 out of 10!. You need a little more developing but that was still brilliant!.

You have a talent, develop on that!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very lovely <333
you seen very caring and nice!.

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thats good!.!.!. its deep!. i give it a 10/10! how long it take u 2 write it!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

great it is a 10 asome u r very talententWww@QuestionHome@Com

NICE! i liked it a lot! =)Www@QuestionHome@Com