Guys.. what do u think of this ?

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Question:

i wrote it yesterday , and i hope u like it !.!.and if u dont , i'll understand!.!.
and plz any good criticizing is essential!.!.
thanks in advance!.!.

here's it:-

I love you!.!.
maybe I can't say it!.!.
but I'm sure!.!.
you can feel it!.!.
maybe we are not together!.!.
and can't even see each other!.!.
but you are in my heart forever!.!.
maybe my hand!.!.
can't touch yours!.!.
but you know that!.!.
I'll always be yours!.!.
when I walk on the beach!.!.
I hear so many sounds!.!.
I hear these birds!.!.
I hear this sea!.!.
but only your voice!.!.
reaches me!.!.
Don't wonder how or why!.!.
just remember you are my love!.!.
and when I say that!.!.
I can't live without you!.!.
I don't lie!.!.
because now I feel like!.!.
I'm going to die!.!.
all the time I cry!.!.
my heart needs you!.!.
and there's no supply!.!.
Baby, that's all because!.!.
You said goodbye!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

OK HERE GOES!.!.!.U SAID I COULD HELP!!
I Love You!
Words not spoken,
I am sure You can feel it,
We are not together,
Can't see each other,
I hold You in my heart,
My hand can't touch you,
You know I'm yours,
A walk on the beach,
So many sounds,
Birds!.!.the sea!.!.!.your voice reaches me!.!.!.!.!.
Not wondering how or why,
I keep You in my Heart!.!.!.My Love!.!.!.
The words I speak!.!.
'Can't live without you'
I never lie,
I feel as though I might die,
As time goes by!.!.!.I cry!
My heart needs You!.!.!.!.
My heart is lonely!.!.!.!.
You know why!.!.
When You said 'Goodbye'!!

I hope that helps a little, U said I could help!.!.!.hugs GaryWww@QuestionHome@Com

wo, good peotry for teen agers!.

niceWww@QuestionHome@Com

Well, it's nice for a teen-aged poem!. And until you hit 20 you're a teen-ager!. You have some talent!. Work with it!. Read, read, read poetry and learn how to write it!. You can become better at it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

very very niceWww@QuestionHome@Com

gr8!.!.!.
it really is relatable
were u, by ne chance inspired by Twilight!?!? ; )Www@QuestionHome@Com

good!.
I couldn't write better english poetry!.Www@QuestionHome@Com