Any comments or critiques on this poem? Any ways to improve?

Question: Any comments or critiques on this poem!? Any ways to improve!?

Devoted Weaver

Painstakingly, she handweaves grass
With bits of turquoise, river rocks, quartz;
An amazing artistry, a creation
Rich in color, texture; design!.

Her life a similar tapestry,
Tending babies, minding fires;
Cleaning pelts and tanning hides
That provide clothing and shelter!.

When the night falls upon ‘this’ day
Her family, wrapped in warm furry love,
Will eat freshly picked berries
From a beautiful basket!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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This is a great tale!. To make it shine more it needs some work on a couple of lines in my opinion!. S2L4 does not flow as well it should!. S3L2: try "her family wrapped, warm furry love" S3L3: transition is missing, perhaps something like: "will arise to freshly picked berries" or "will arise to eat fresh berries!." A great poem!. My compliments!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lovely, and the title is so well suited to her cicle of love!.

(I have an Indian worry basket at my inside back door)

Sleeply bed time!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

My view, no improvement is needed!. You speak well of the old ways around this place, the hills and canyons are listening!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it the way it is!. You did well!.Www@QuestionHome@Com