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Question: Short to the point and morbid!. My kind of poem!.!?
"i feel her anger"
Stepping to the devils own,
towards midnight and her throne!.
Driven by her sickened lust,
pleasure in just virgin blood!.
The bringer of decades of pain,
with venoumous desire!.
She the godess of that burns,
Grows, inside she feeds my fire!.
She the Queen of all thats night,
ruins of the future she holds tight!.
In this ilfe, Ithere is no shelter,
a conundrum, the chosen one!.
Dead stars dimly guide my way,
enslaved to her bright green eyes!.
Life slowly fades away, born in fire,
deadly hallowed ground, unscathed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
ENSLAVED TO HER BRIGHT GREEN EYES'' Love this
because I have "GREEN EYES" You are really doing ok!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
That is one of the best poems I have read, I love morbid stuff too!. Edgar Allan Poe is my all time favorite writer!.
Here is a poem i wrote this afternoon, see if you ca make sense of it!.
We’re not taking any prisoners
I want to see the blood shed!.
I want to feel the red spread!.
All over my hands!.
Puts me in a trance!.
It seems so sick in your mind!.
But it’ll all make sense in time!.
I’m not taking any prisoners!.
A soul of fire!.
A heart of ice!.
You just conspire!.
And tell them lies!.
You say they’ll be alright!.
Then leave without a fight!.
You’re not taking any prisoners!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Is this your work!? If you are considering revising it, I would work on the rhythm of it - it sounds like you're working with iambic pentameter, but read it out loud and listen for variations or breaks in the rhythm!. also, I would consider something more at the end to wrap it all up!. Good job, though!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It seems you have reverted back to you morbidity!. The darkness has returned to your world by chance!? It is good as always!. Thanks!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
The rhyme scheme changes then goes away, but nonetheless, I think I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com