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Question: This cold weather* a poem:) i hope you like:):) plz read!.!?
THE SOUND OF THE WIND
THE CHILLS IN MY SKIN
MY FINGERS VERY COLD
THEY START FEELING NUMB

NEEDING WARMTH IN MY SKIN
A HUG OR ANY CUDDLING WILL DO
IS WHAT ANY GUY OR GIRL IS WISHING FOR
IN THIS FREEZING COLD WEATHER

I LOOK AROUND AWKWARDLY
THE COLOR OF THE BUILDING
FADING GREY
VERY GLOOMY, VERY DEAD

REMINDING ME OF THE GRASS
THAT I STEP ON PURPOSELY
JUMPING ON IT, KILLING IT MORE
ITS GREEN ALMOST YELLOW
ITS LOSING LIFE IN THIS WEATHER

BASKETBALLS BOUNCING HARD
THE SOUND ECHOS PAASSING BY MY EARS
ITS GETTING CLOSER AND CLOSER
ITS BOTHERING ME, ITS FRUSTRATING

I FEEL EMPTY, I FEEL LOST
I FEEL LONELY, I FEEL COLD
IN THIS PLACE FILLED WITH SORROW
IM DYING SLOWLEY IN THIS WEATHERWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
This is a very good poem!. But, I'm wondering if this is what you are really feeling because well, it isn't really optimistic, but it's a very good poem!. You could correct some grammar and some spelling and I think it will be perfect! Hope this helps!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Again lots of good organic imagery that is now portrayed by the cold weather!. And I love the tone that you set for the poem - very gloomy and cold!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it alot, maybe we should talk!.!.!. im on aim yak4life419Www@QuestionHome@Com