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Question: Could you please give me some feedback on my poem!?
For Something So Small
How do you put your heart back together
When you don't even know how it broke
When everything was said and done
So fast I lost all hope
How do you trust someone when you've been hurt
When they took all you had and treated it like dirt
When they pushed you around just because they could
And when you sat there and took it because you thought that you should
How do you sleep at night when you can't even breathe
Because you miss them so much
But they'll never see
You need them just to wake up and not bleed
How does it feel to not have a clue
That all that you loved was falling through
How does it feel to lose all you have
For something so small
Its really so sad!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
It's a good but painful poem, but you do make use of a lot of cliched expressions!. If it was written about a genuine breakup, the cliches would be excusable, because no words can sum it up properly!. But for creativity, you can be freer with your expressions!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This is a really beautiful and!.!.!. sad poem!. I love your writing and the idea of this poem!. Maybe its because I have been hurt in a way like that!.!.!.!.!. or maybe its because it is genuinely beautiful!. Keep Writing!. :) Good Luck!Www@QuestionHome@Com
I am usually not much for poems, but I really like this one!. It especially speaks to me because I can apply it to some of my own life situtaions!. I think that you did a wonderful job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its good, but like 95% of the poems out there, its generic!.!.!.Peple just cant seem to get past the confines that they think they are breaking out of with "poetry"
But it is a decent poemWww@QuestionHome@Com
I honestly thought it was beautiful
nice job it's really good!
I really liked the first stanzaWww@QuestionHome@Com
it's good, but it reminds me too much of my own life!. sounds like everything is the same for everyone elseWww@QuestionHome@Com
It's beautiful creative, and it sound's like me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
its beautifull, i can see how u manage 2 put your heart in2 words, a talent not alot of ppl have!.Www@QuestionHome@Com