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Question: Please Tell Me What You Think and Please Be Honest!?

Born Again

Little girl
Fighting to live
Fighting to breath and
Fighting to keep her eyes opened
She’s dying
Her hair is falling off
Her skin is very pale and
Her eyes are sunken in
The bible is here
She reads it every night
She has Faith
She believes in God
She will live again
She will be Born Again
The days go by
Feeling weaker and weaker
Feeling like giving up and
Feeling like shutting down
She has Faith
She will be Born Again
Little girl
Frustrated
Scared and
Tired
Falls asleep
With the Bible
Under her pillow
Wakes up and
She is told that she can
Finally go home
To have a normal life
To live again because
She was Born Again
Never loose you’re Faith
God is always with youWww@QuestionHome@Com

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I like it very much!. I actually get two i meanings when i read it!. 1!. A little girl going through the struggles of life is going through all these different emotions but at the same time is holding on strongly and is not going to let them take her under because she has the strength of God with her!. 2!. I see me just two years ago going through the same struggles but with faith i have overcome and live to speak on it today!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Last part could be:
To have a normal life,
to live again as she was born again!.
She never lost faith for
God was with her!.

The focus is the girls overcoming her battle with "her" faith in God!. The focus is not to be shifted from that fact!. Sure it is t be known that the "message" is not to lose faith because God is always there but the message is one persons battle with cancer and how "she" overcame it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

What are you really trying to tell here, I m a bit lost!.!.!.Are you telling not to loose hope but then why a completely new start in life!?Are you trying to give a message out there, that to have faith!? Seems like a hopeless situation she is in, but what is the point here!?!?!.!. That reading bible will make us stronger!?!? And I think this poem is a bit long, repeating the same theme not in a unique way!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

take out all the 'ands' and at the line falls asleep make it she falls asleep
put it in a drawer and don't look at it for two weeks then read it and the errors with most likely pop out so you can revise for a better flow!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Honestly speaking, this is a nice poem!. Kindly include your other poem to GroundReport!.com You will not only develop your ability to write poetry but you will also earn from your compositions!. Try it!. For I already earned from contributing some articles and poetry there!.
Have a nice day and GOD BLESS US ALL!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

well it seems wonderful!.It seems like you put alot of soul and when i say that i mean alot of soul!.Any way that was good you can become a poem writer , that was magnificant!. so thats what i think of it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

ha ha that girl is rude, I think its sweet, sad but sweet, make a good song, courtney love should sing itWww@QuestionHome@Com

aww that is so sweet and thoughtful!. Is it a song or poem!? Very nice!. You truly have talent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's inspiring!. It's deep and spiritual!. I love it!. :3Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like it!. It's really sad But I like it!. I wish there were sites I could tell you to post them on but I myself don't know any that aren't full of crooks!. Good Job love it!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sad, but beautifulWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it is inspiring and blends well together!. I see no fault with it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I'm a born again christian, and I'm crying in my office right now!. That's wonderful, and the truth! Thanks for brightening my day!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Very moving!. I can almost see the little girl!. Good job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Once I read the words "Born Again", I gave up!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

cuteeeeeeeeeeeeee i love it it should be published:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

NOT BAD ITS REALLY GOOD!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

AwWww@QuestionHome@Com

I like it, although I do not have a religion!. It is very inspiring! 8/10!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Touching and deep!Www@QuestionHome@Com

sorry but i'm athiestWww@QuestionHome@Com

that was sweet doesn't rhym but it is GOODWww@QuestionHome@Com

very good!.!.!.!.nice jobWww@QuestionHome@Com

weird!. and scaryWww@QuestionHome@Com

That's Right!.!.!.I respect you for saying that!. I'm A True Believer!.!.!.!.!.Nice Poem!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i aint reading that long ****, i just want my 2 pointsWww@QuestionHome@Com