Me. just a poem. whaddya think?

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Question:

doesn't rhyme!. doesn't have foots or meters or wtfe!.

I am hollowed ground,
Walk on me and fall right threw,
Invisible as midnight rain,
Stand beside me; see right threw me!.

I murmur when I speak,
My breaths appear nothing more than smoke,
I break easily like budding flowers,
Tear me apart; break my heart!.

I walk in whispers,
My footsteps leave no trace,
My shadow is dense and vile,
Touch me I feel nothing, Feel me and step right in!.

Follow a beating heart,
Hovering aimlessly into the air,
See that it connects to nothing,
That has what become of me!.
Beats and it bleeds; Beats and it bleeds!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Wow!. What a beautiful, melancholy portrayal!. I really like it- it's passionate!.

(just so you know, though, 'threw' should be spelled 'through'- but that doesn't take away from the poem!.)Www@QuestionHome@Com

Has such a desolation to it!. Felt sad reading it!. Liked it though!.
Would it spoil it for you to correct the spelling in the first 'verse' of threw to through!? Though, perhaps it all adds to the desolation as it is!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

True, it sounds like tomtom!. Sad, silent!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Hear TomTom calling!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i like it

I too, bruise like a summer peachWww@QuestionHome@Com