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Question: A poem for you to analyze!. Do u like it!.!?
"egypt"
Give to me your withered flesh,
I will grant to you newly minted life!.
A life that far exceeds your needs,
the frontiers of your shallow mind!.
All you need is summon me, I'll show you,
realms of death, sorrow and horrid pain!.
Pleasure and dark configuration, all of your desires,
Sex and bondage, torture and love, sadomasochism!.
I will now and forever, be known as a legend of man!.
when the ancient ones return, to these unholy grounds
The power left in the hands of, forever sleeping fools,
I woke them, stole their powers, I knew what I was to do!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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wow!! I never knew someone could put BDSM in a poem with minted leaves!! LOL but you did and you did it perfectly!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
The first three lines had me going!.!.!.but then the poem turned in upon itself, imploding in complex syllables and darkness for darkness sake!.!.!.never "say" sadomasochism!.!.!.you can create images, but don't actually use the word!.!.!.it's like explaining the punchline to to a joke!. The last two stanzas have potential, but are overextended!.!.!. I'd take the first three stanzas and rewrite everything thereafter!.!.!.the first three show how good it could be!.!.!.now make the rest as good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
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good job
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