How can I improve Part II, of Sin Seeker?

Question: How can I improve Part II, of Sin Seeker!?

--Sin Seeker_
*Part II~

A man who held a secret
closer than a child
a knowledge that in sin
he would not be reconciled
My goal was set before me
for he who bore the spot
The scent of his deeds wafted
burning like dark rot
The powers could not pardon
his crimes against the crown
On this star filled summer night
I
would lay him down
-My charge Sin’s own SeekerWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Why do you do this to us!? Just give us the rest of it, I can't handle the suspense!.

I do have two comments!.
#1 Should "crown" be capitalized!?
#2 Just as a matter of good form and style, I think you should not begin a line with a dash!. But I think you may have a reason for doing this!. I'd like to know about both points!.

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So now we are seeing behind the facade of the perfect family!. I think I am slowly starting to figure our who the speaker of the poem is!. A detached fifth party perhaps, commissioned by the gods to remove the stain from the earth!. No matter what we do or look like or portray, something always bubbles beneath the surface!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Dark and preternatural, the series continues!.!.!.any poem that starts as powerfully as "A man who held a secret!.!.!.closer than a child" is bound to be not only stunning in form, but full of pathos that burns into the soul!. Please, please continue!.!.!.thank you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Just read the first and this continues it well!.!.!. I am on the edge, hoping for the next one soon!.!.!. even I cannot tell where you are going with it and I should know you pretty well!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com