Another poem!. Do you think I can improve and how please!?
She lifted her head up
And wiped away the tears
She knew she needed that someone
To help her fight her fears
To give her a shoulder to cry on
Or to keep her going through
Life was too cruel and harsh
Nobody even had a clue
The pain she had felt
She never could have dealt
Without her mother by her side
And all the lies she had denied
Now it was too late
Maybe after all, this was truly her fate
She lifted her head up
And stood there staring at the grave
Where her mother lies
As she says her last goodbye
Here's the other poem!.
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I read the last one and this one as well!.!.!.!.!.both are really well written ones!.!.!.!.!.so keep the pen moving!.!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
yehh its really good, but you did change your rhyming pattern half way through, to every line rhyming with the one under it, but you started by making every other line ryhme =/
but i still like it alot!Www@QuestionHome@Com
hell with the rules of rhyme and meter!.!.and hell with those who make and follow such rules that kills the very soul of poetry!.!.!.
when a bird sings, he does not care for rhyme and rules!.!.he just sings because he wants to sing!.!.he does not want people to listen and appreciate his song!.!.he does not want his name in print!.!.he does not want to win competitions and prizes!.!.he just wants to sing!.!.!.
Sing out the poem in your heart!.!.don't ask people their opinions!.!.this is quite rubbish!.!.u liked it and that is why u wrote it!.!.isn't it enough !?Www@QuestionHome@Com