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Question: Is my poem really bad!? Do you think I could be any good!? Can you please tell me how to improve!.!?
I use simple words but here it is:
I used to reach for you when I lost my way
But now that you're gone I have nothing left to say
You destroyed me
You broke my heart
How am I supposed to react
Now that we're apart
You have no idea about the pain I feel
Every single day
It's just too surreal
I fake a smile when all I want to do is scream
My heart out, hoping that it was just a dream
Meeting you was a mistake
But all I do is ache
My heart, my love to you
It was all a mistake!
From the moment I met you
Till the day you left
You really should have seen
Every tear that I have ever wept
I was shattered
Loving you, to me, was the only thing that ever mattered
I thought you were the one
The one I was meant to be with
I should have have known
True love was just a mythWww@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'm not a great fan of love-lost poems, I'm too old I suppose!.
Having said that I think you have done well here!. There are only one or two places where the reader stumbles, so most of it flows very well!. Considering, too that you have provided a lot of rhymes here you haven't used 'desperate' rhyming just for the sake of it!.
Before you finally say 'okay' to this poem, read it out loud a few times- see, if it says what you want to say, and emphasises what you want emphasising!.
I think you can be proud of thisWww@QuestionHome@Com
dont worry!.!.!.!.!.!.!.the poem is good!.!.!.and you really have the talent!.!.!.!.and like some one said above, you can put this into music!.!.!.
and you can improve by writing more and more and reading more poems!.!.!.
best wishes!!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Veritant is right it's more of a song and it would make a great song, too! but it's good!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
You've written a song! Put it to music!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I thought it was very good!. How to improve!? Hmmm!.!.!.Put the pen down!.!. Joking I'd love to see more of your workWww@QuestionHome@Com
AGH!
this is so good!
keep up the good work!!! :DWww@QuestionHome@Com
hey girl ,,this is so good !!
you are in a good beginning of writing ,soon you will get to a higher level ,,trust me !
if you really wanna improve, read Shakespeare's,Emily Dickinson and others poems( they inspire you and open up your mind ) ,,and just keep on writing , write what is inside your heart, inside your soul ! see the world through a writer's eyes !.!.!.
you know ,writing helped me alot in my life,, see, when you write down your feelings ,you feel much better ! plus ,,,on papers ,,you can write whatever you want, you can laugh,you can cry ,you can curse without getting punished , you can fly without falling ! ( as a close friend of mine once said )Www@QuestionHome@Com