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Question: Do you actually like this poem!? Critiques please!? Any ideas for a title!?
BTW, I just turned twelve so don't think this is going to be adult quality!.

They watch her dancing
like an angel
out of heaven!.
They wonder how
she got here;
this Hell on Earth!.
This is the
castle of scoundrels,
the palace of
Ruffians,
yet all are caught
in her intricately
woven spell of a
Dance!.
She moves so lithely;
liquid humanity in
purest form!.
She twirls with
Abandon,
with sweat beading on her
Brow!.
She exists for this
moment only:
the wild applause
of the
Damned!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
you just turned 12!?!?!?!?!?!?
I like it a lot! I've loved "liquid humanity"Www@QuestionHome@Com

That was pretty good!. A 12 year old!? Wow, keep going on!. At such a young age you really are talented!.Www@QuestionHome@Com