What do you guys think of this poem I wrote today?

Question: What do you guys think of this poem I wrote today!?

Suicidal Fantasy

Hanging on the edge
Of my suicidal fantasy
Consumed within my mind
How it has to be
No one understands
No one else can see
How I get so lost
In my suicidal fantasy
I die within myself
Every living day
I understand within myself
I can’t go on this way
That’s how I get trapped
In a mind that’s not my own
It’s a suicidal fantasy
Waiting to be done
Numbers are being counted
Pressure starting to bend
This suicidal fantasy
Coming to an endWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Set it to some Screemo, it's the perfect song format, poetry, not so much!. But you're alright, just, for the love of God, go hug somebody who loves you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

the style and the form that you write is very good,
just work on the dictation and the way you word itWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think its very sad and you need to talk to someone close to you!. *hug*
good luck!.!.!.!.p!.s!. you did a good job with it thoughWww@QuestionHome@Com

I thought it was very cool!. Glad to see someone pay attention to punctuation and meter and tackle a reduntant subject such as this one in a way that makes perfect sense!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Borat quote
"very nice!"Www@QuestionHome@Com

The style is quite good, but the content is a little bleak!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Someone needs a THERAPIST LMFAOWww@QuestionHome@Com

Good poem, but I don't like the depressing topic!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

meh its ok I guessWww@QuestionHome@Com