A Farmers Song?

Question: A Farmers Song!?

A small tribute to a way of life, slowly disappearing

The Farmer

With furrowed brow and farmer's tan
he struggled for a dream!.
What he wanted no man knew,
what he needed they all felt too!.
Through changing seasons
and weather woes!.!.!.
he labored long and watched the cycles!.
From seedlings small to golden grain
his world spoke in metronome!.
But just as greens do fade
to golden hues so his age
chimed a slower chord!.
And though the gait does slow
and rocker calls!.!.!.
the need never does!.
The need to be a part, yet create
to bring life to fertile loams!.
To reap subtle gifts that God has given!.
To be a man that earned his keep!.
AmenWww@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

I have to agree with Elaine,

his world spoke in metronome

That is just plain brilliant!. That is the type of line that justifies why you sat down to write!. Insightful!.

I also liked:

!.!.!.his age
chimed a slower chord!.

to bring life to fertile loams!.

To reap subtle gifts!.!.!.

Ending with "Amen" makes his life seem like a prayer, a doxology!.

Very nice piece!. Well done!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

"His world spoke in metronome," a marvelous image of life's rhythms as the poet was young, the "slower chord," carrying forward a metaphor of growing older, the music fading as the "rocker calls" and the final need to have reaped what he has sowed!. The "Amen," reinforces the image of reaping and sowing!. Excellent imagery carried from the beginning to the end of the poem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I never belonged to that way of life!. This poem captures everything that was missing in my life!. I've lead an "uptown girl" life all these years!. How simple and fulfilling is such a life that you painted in this poem!. Seriously!.!.!.reading this poem has evoked a kind of "strange" feelings within me!.
A pastoral poem written in a very non-archaic, modest form!.!.!.making it easier for us, the readers to connect to, whether or not could we relate to!. A very down-to-earth, back to the basics and "religious" poem!. I enjoyed reading this so so much!. Thank you so much for sharing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

There once was a time when farmers were paid to plow their crops under because of market glut!. Now the farmer's role might be changing - from a feeder of men - to one of machines!. I hear crops are going for auto fuel instead of feeding people!. So we all starve so that the auto can continue!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yep, this is really really good!.

i've worked on farms, and i miss it at times!. there's nothing like working with plants and the dirt!. i think it was a very formative experience for me!.!.!.

anyway, you have a couple of references to music in here which really adds to it!. chord and metronome!. this is really nice stuff!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Good Morning!!! No songs!!

You have twined the seasonal cycles with the man and the Earth very well!.!.!.need to reproduce something, anything!. Both are blessed/burdened with this call, for call it is!. Everything living feels the cyclic change!.!.!.!.tick, tock, tick, tock!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

People embedded in the earth upon departure due to age
or changing times, leave part of their soul behind!.
your words capture that beauty!. Blessings and Kudos!
(another to share) thank you!.

You leave me misty eyed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!.!.!.!.!.this is beautiful!.
It reminds me so much of my Grandpa!.
Thank you for the read!.
It really touched me and I know it would have touched him too if he was still with us!.
Very nice:)Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is marvelous wording!. You have beautifully described what drives a farmer forward!. Excellent write and thoroughly enjoyed reading thisWww@QuestionHome@Com

This is an excellent description of where a farmer's heart lies!. Insightful and enjoyable to read!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is how the new world repays hard work!.!.!.!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

You and I must be on the same wave-length - this speaks volumes to me!. I value those whose lives are uneventful, who labour year in, year out - who find purpose in what they do even tho' it doesn't set the world on fire!.

' his world spoke as a metronome' noun
or 'his world spoke in monotone' - dict!. a single sound with no variation in pitch

- could you leave out 'do' and 'does' - it sounds unnatural!.
But just as greens
fade to golden hues,
so his age
chimes a slower chord!.
And though his gait slows
and rocker calls
the need never leaves!.!.!.!.!.(or the longing, perhaps)
The need to be a part!.!.!.!.!.!.!.

You've triumphed again!. A lovely, lyrical piece creating a vivid picture for all to see!. Thank you
ps - nearly forgot - I love that little pun at the beginning - was it intentional!? (furrowed brow!)Www@QuestionHome@Com