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Question: What is your opinion on this poem!? Suggestions!?
Here I am, lost in this perilous territory; The real of thought!./
I wonder the dark depths of mind's eye; A cat prowling by the moon's sky!./
Searching, for an absent memory; For what was not!./
Oh, this stubborn mind! The curiosity that slaughtered the cat!./
What would it have been; this tale untold of a life unlived in!./
An unjust providence deined; At our fortold love it spat!./
I am forever paind with your doom; For your 9 came too soon!./
In my heart, hisses all but hate; Instead, a destitution to understand this fate!./
You, child, will never bloom; To the pain of unknown, I must become immune!./
There is no satisfaction to rescue me; All I have is a quess!./
For your absence I will cry; For our lost love I will shout, why!?/
Where ther should be laughter there is silence; Where there should be love,/
there is an empty abyss!.!.!./
Until we meet again, you I will always missWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Okay, It's an amazing poem but i think you're complicating things unnecessarily and taking away from the true meaning!. keep it simple and passionate!. be your own influence!. youre great :)Www@QuestionHome@Com