A rewrite for "bondage" Pain is good, how is ithis.?

Question: A rewrite for "bondage" Pain is good, how is ithis!.!?

"bondage"

You take me to places,
I anve never been!.
Dark desires for my sin,
Levels I've not seen!.

The dark side of love,
bondage is my game!.
I fantasize back and forth,
to that very day!.

I beld and carried on,
the dark sid of love!.
Your rached soen in my heart,
and you took control!.

I'd trust you with my life,
I've nothing to fear!.
All my life i've looked for you,
So much for us to do!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

its perfect steve!! It makes me wanna feel the pain!. Its very good!. XoxoWww@QuestionHome@Com

I HAVE NOT ENJOYED READING THE ORIGINAL (BONDAGE) BUT HAVE ENJOYED YOURS!.YOU HAVE ADDED WARMTH,ROMANCE AND INTELLIGENCE!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Is a good poem but your attitude worries me!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

thats was good !.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com