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Left to Chance
Once upon a cool September morning
As the crisp autumn leaves fell unanchored
The trees stood towering over the landscape
Wind flowing peacefully over the hills
The feeling of intoxication filled the air
Our love blossomed truly
We sat together enjoying the fruit from the vine,
You were mine
I could only hope I was yours too
You looked at me, I looked at you
I asked you if you'd like to dance,
I left it to chance
You asked me did I love you
I said a thousand times I do
And then you had to go
I love you so
I left it all to chance
Brady Lee Turner
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
I'm sorry but I want to be honest with you!. This isn't a poem, it's prose chopped up into several lines!. I love the passion and intensity of it but it's too literal and straight-forward in meaning!. Poetry is about visualization, it is much like a stage play in the mind!. What you can do is be more playful - I'm sure you can do it! Don't think in concrete terms but in abstracts!.
"When a spade is not a spade,
when a flower is not a flower
when a heart is not heart,
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Just being honest - sounds like you've listed to Garth Brooks' "The Dance" too many times!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
how about dropping everything after vine and maybe breaking it into two different poems!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
This poem is so romantic!.!.!.I like it!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com