Still early, so I'm sill writing. Jow is this sort oe.?

Question: Still early, so I'm sill writing!. Jow is this sort oe!.!?

"grudgeoflove'

Burden of blood,
who we are!.
Ties are now forgotten,
Grudges are still found!.

Inflicting all these scars,
forced to long ago!.
Left inside my council,
justice you will learn!.

Each of us has boundaries,
each a breaking point!.
Try you might to slip away,
learn to respect the pain!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

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Of course I like it!.BURDEN OF BLOOD!. The best line!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

The picture you are trying to paint with your words is quite interesting!. However, the first two stanzas are too Yoda for my taste!. I know you wanted to make it unconventional but it sounds awkward instead!. The last stanza, meanwhile is not as intense as the first two so it sounds disjointed and out of place!. This poem seems too overworked and contrived!.

I think what you need to do is find your voice!. Write by letting the words flow freely on paper then edit afterwards!. If you do that then the images will just keep on coming, I assure you!.

"Frozen ember in the pot,
melted tears will burn the knot!.!.!."Www@QuestionHome@Com

i just woke up i cant thinkWww@QuestionHome@Com