This is the poem "win,place, show" using Todd's edits. Better or w

Question: This is the poem "win,place, show" using Todd's edits!. Better or worse!.!?

"win, place, show"

What else
can i do!?
What to say!?
Taught myself to love
you,
never looking right at you!.
What have I done to
you!?
Left me all alone,
symbol of my lust,
fills your eyes and ears,
Placing second in your heart!.
I was so distant!.

Thanks for taking an interest Todd!. I personally can't decide between your edits and Elysabeths!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Well in fairness I was critiquing a piece that you'd already incorporated Elysabeth's comments into!. It all goes down to personal preference both poems are good!. I think you need the question marks whichever way you choose!. I like line 6 much better here and I love the ending!.!.!.but again that's a preference thing, and not necessarily any more "right" than anything else!.

Just trying to add to the thought process!.

Best,

ToddWww@QuestionHome@Com

"Never looking right at you!." Much better - now giving it a feeling of possible shyness or insecurity!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

i loved the original!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

innocent !.!.!.cute poem!.!.,may i steal it to write a person i love so much!.!Www@QuestionHome@Com