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Question: New poem!!! plz give hones opinion!?
just before i post it, i would rather is you plz dont criticizes without a suggestion of how to make it better:
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By Georgia Hammond
And as you speak you slowly kill
Messages, enough to fill
The strongest hearts with grief and lies
Twisted tongues, your soul disguise
To hide the words from its cruel place
The one hardest thing to unface
The truth, the words to give or take
To make us pay for our mistake
You can’t do wrong because one day
Some one will slip, and you will pay
Truth will have its dark return
And your insides will slowly burn…Www@QuestionHome@Com
Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
thats a really great poem, its dark and daunting which i dont normally like, but it was written quite well!. u dont have 2 change anything, the last line drags a bit,
u could try
truth will have its dark return
"while your insides slowly burn"Www@QuestionHome@Com
I like it! Seems to really do it's job and i couldn't find any grammatical errors I'd suggest fixing!. Good Job!
Title: "Hearing darkness" !?Www@QuestionHome@Com
Its great dont change anything!.
Try divine anticipation!.
I liked the poem a lot!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Well, how about Messages!? It's pretty good!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
I love it! It is pure poetry, u will surely make a difference in this world some day! Thanx 4 makin' my day!Www@QuestionHome@Com