An evening poem. How do u like this.?

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Question:

"breaking point"

Burden of blood,
I know what you are!.
Knowledge that burns,
now it takes charge!.

Blood ties forsaken,
grudges still held!.
Why does my heart,
feel all this rage!.

Inflicted scars,
so long ago!.
deep is the pain,
from ages ago!.

Hollow indulgence,
the power plays!.
My heart is broken,
a man born today!.

Snakes in the grass,
no honor or soul!.
You've no respect,
no real surprise!.

I am dead set,
you'll make your own bed!.
Run fast as you can,
hell comes for you!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

yes a change emotion in your writing!.!.!.!.very well said!.!.how r u!.!.steve!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow
That was HORRIBLE!!
Just kidding! It was everything FAR from horrible!. Its great! great emotion, and feeling!. I would normally say it must have taken a lot of thought but, you seem like you really have a natural talent!! =]Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow!.!.!.sounds very angry, yet it moves me!. I like it, you have talent, and you have alot of of passion and emotion!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Yes, Love this!. I need to borrow this fantastic line,"HELL COMES FOR YOU"!.I want to use it when I go TROLL
Hunting!. GOOD,GOOD,GOOD!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

This is very aggressive and vengeful!. I like it!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Sounds like a pit bull has gotten into it and doesn't want to let go!. good one DP!.Www@QuestionHome@Com