What do you think of my crazy-person poetry?

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Question:

I'm not really sure what this is!.!.!.
it just sort of "came out!."
Tell me if you think it's too weird/random whatever!.

"Strawberry Brain PART I: 'The Arrival' (Revised Version)"

Strawberry brain
Caught under my vanilla skin
Your voice is the same shade of melted chocolate as your eyes!.
I'd like to sit behind you again
and talk into the back of your head!.
I wonder what your back feels like!.
(Muscles wrapped in cotton!.)
You smell like fever!.

We are probably the same flavor of fallingapart
If you promise not to let me let you think I'm crazy
I'll promise not to kick you again!.

You smell like fever!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Magical!. Playing with words, having fun, trying them out to see how they run!.!.!.!.sorry I wasn't intending to rhyme!.
I love this!. My image of it is you sitting behind a boy in class, the warm sun shining through the windows (they're on the left for some reason in my vision!) and you not learning a thing about pythagorus's theorem!.
Love it!.
I love the line 'if you promise not to let me let you think I'm crazy!. Don't change a thing!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

I think this poem has 'potential!.' To me, it's about a person explaining to a real or imagined other person that they are very different people but have the same kind of problems, so tother they may be able to find happiness or friendship!. It demonstrates the closeness between intimacy and fear!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Speaking as a non-poetic crazy person, I think your poem is great! It's different than what I've been reading on here, but interesting!. Thanks for sharing!. :)Www@QuestionHome@Com

I like this!. You told the story so clearly!. We all felt the chair bump!.!.!.again!.!.!.TDWww@QuestionHome@Com