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Question: What do you think about this poem I wrote!?
The evening rush
People lost in their business minds
The days time is meaning
Look deep into the world
Nothing ever stays the same
If truth was voice
Then lies were burdened silence
And the roads direction was wrong
At least the journey gave you guidance
And the noise of life was a song
Has anyone ever paused
Stopped and looked at their surroundings
Threw the clocks in the rivers
Forgot the date and searched the sky
Paint the future and said goodbye
People search for inspiration
Have they looked in odd cities
A new town with artful opinion
And the grass which changes shade
Life is a train which circles
And some will dare to turn away

Bright lights which make me fight my eyes
Late nights which make my brain fry
Shall I sleep though it seems a waste
While so many questions stay unanswered
And answers propose scarce truth
Now I know for some part
But now I know
And is this the problem of American pride
Like non conformity which must have died
And my emotions vibrant and bold
Like creativity which must have sighed
And this is the way entrupernuers must have sold
Say goodbye to no direction
Maps and plans are the gods which make us cold
And there is no vaccine for this infection
except maybe to throw the words at the paper
To search even when it seems the end is near
Life is the roll of a dice
And some will dare to take a riskWww@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
i love it, its amazing =)

i love the line that goes:
Has anyone ever paused
Stopped and looked at their surroundings
Threw the clocks in the rivers
Forgot the date and searched the sky
Paint the future and said goodbye

i love it! great job!! u should get it published =) and definately keep writing!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Wow, a good peer into the human psyche and the world of consumerism!. It is a good thing to create a space for oneself and write, as you have done so here!.!.!.keep your eyes open!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Lines 1 and 2 and 11 through 19 were very good!.
The rest was too wordy!. It became presumptuous and cliche-ridden!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

LOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOVVVVVVEEEEEEEEE IT

Get it published!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

wow, you should get that published!. not very many people take the time to write poetry anymore, and the few that do don't seem to go in depth in what they're writing!. you however, went further than in depth!. this is amazing, im at a loss for words of how good it is!.
great job:]]

[i can only say this because i know how hard it is to write or remember exactly what to say when you're writing poetry!. i call myself a poet!.!.but i'm not exactly!.!.that poem was breathtaking!.Www@QuestionHome@Com