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Question: Will this poem be ok for mars!?
I'd like to take a special trip,
To Mars in my own rocket ship!.
To sit in the communal dome,
Where poets all can be at home!.
To write my verse and read aloud,
And hope to do the poets proud!.
To listen to the words of peers,
Without the constant fear of jeers!.
Alas I fear this cannot be,
My age may be the end of me!.
The age of travel to the stars,
Or even to the place called Mars,
Is not yet in our future plan,
Though I will go there if I can!.
Should I not make the trip this time,
Someone please take this little rhyme!.
Read it to the group up there,
Then tape it to my reading chair!.
You'll feel my spirit as it hears,
The readings and the heartfelt cheers!.Www@QuestionHome@Com


Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
Dondi - my eyes are prickling again - these damn tears are trying hard to escape!.!.!.!.!.but, I'm fighting 'em off!.

I hope you will be there!. I'm sure you will be there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

CHEERS! CHEERS! CHEERS! Huzzah for Dondi, Poet extraordinaire! This was a beautiful and stirring sentiment!. Who knows, with the gas prices and lack of rights to water, we may all go to Mars and live cheaper!. We welcome you, Dondi, into our hearts and domes!. Welcome to Mars!.!.!.we are better for you here!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

Ya know, for a meter of 8 in every line! this is excellent! You have constructed with discipline, but more than that!.!.!.heart!.
You are 19 and you know it!
WE will be reading, AND listening!
Dondi, this is delightful!.!.!.!.I will be seeing you on Mars! With your wonderful meter and well done rythme!!!!!Www@QuestionHome@Com

That's mellifluous Dondi!.!.!.!.really great, sweet and well sung! but you are already in Mars!.!.!.because we poets have our world in our dreams!.!.!.we imagine our lives and live hereafter through the verses!.!.!.!.!.and your stream of music shall have a life ever in the red planet, flourish beyond profusion!Www@QuestionHome@Com

We are as close to Mars as we will ever be!. Your songs hold an honored place there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

BravoWww@QuestionHome@Com

I think it's very good, ride the tail of a comet to get there!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

this is a 10 / 10Www@QuestionHome@Com

For such a fictional space and time, you make it real!. Another Dondi gem!.Www@QuestionHome@Com

yesWww@QuestionHome@Com

wow me likeWww@QuestionHome@Com