My poem give your opinions?

Question: My poem give your opinions!?

Black Moon

A blackened moon relining your blackened heart
shon down a silver charm monochrome thy
her years of glory, eclipsing, rotating,
though shortening, shattering, soon to die!.

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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:

Can I just say: Your really good! I love your other poems aswell their awesome! Anyways im adding you as a contact ok!?Www@QuestionHome@Com

Bravo! It's clear that you're very talented!. I love your use of metaphors, and your word choice is stunning! Keep up your great work! I hope to see it in print someday!Www@QuestionHome@Com

Great choice of words!
I love ur poems
They show emotions
Pointlessness, a great piece
i read it with please!
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