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Question: It's business, not personal!. Do you agree!?
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by TD Euwaite
If not for the rope
My neck would not stretch
And the bank that I robbed
Won’t go broke
It’s easy for me
To see that you need
For me to swing from
The old Oak
Let’s talk over tea
Most respectfully
Regarding the width
Of my throat…
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Best Answer - Chosen by Asker:
TD, I fear you have along with others turned me into a critic!. Stanza one!.!.!.try this
If not for the rope,
My neck would not stretch
The bank that that I robbed
Will never go broke!.
Just by changing three words it flows better!. LOL I like this!.
Stanza 2
It's easy for me
To see that you need
For me to swing
From the Oak tree!.
Better!?
Stanza 3
Let's talk over tea,
Most respectfully
Regarding the width
Of my throat naturally!.
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I don't know if you like it better or not, but i thought I'd take a shot at critiquing one of yours!. I only changed a few things and I think it flows much more smoothly!.!.!.kind of like a body, slowly swinging in the breeze!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Preparation is everything in execution!Www@QuestionHome@Com
lol!. it's good!.
i love the ending!.!.!.i mean seriously, it's good!. but, i don't get the bank part!? but it's probably just me!. it is too cool!. =]Www@QuestionHome@Com
DON'T LEAVE US!!! If you are having suicidal thoughts please seek medical or spiritual help immediately!. All life is precious!.!.!.
yeah, right!. Kidding!. Loved the poem!. It is business, therefore I do not take it personally, or seriously!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
nice poem!.!.!.yea, me too, I can't see what's the bank for!.!.well the poem is still good, though!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Good poem TD, although I'm not sure anything ever went down this smoothly!.!.!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
Trying to publish two books at the same time can make one feel like swinging--and I mean from a tree! Hang in there!Www@QuestionHome@Com
This interesting, humorous!. Once again, I thoroughly enjoyed!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
erm suicidal!? hang in there buddy =pWww@QuestionHome@Com
This time tomorrow
Reckon where I'll be
Down in some lonesome valley
Hangin' from a white oak treeWww@QuestionHome@Com
Stretch that tea time indefinitely!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
No noose is good noose!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
It's all business & I didn't take it personal !.!.!.!.!.!.Most respectfully!.!.!.!.!.!. It was quite goodWww@QuestionHome@Com
Guillotines did a very clean job!.Www@QuestionHome@Com
YIKES! He sounds like a sneaky one!
Keep your eye on your tea!Www@QuestionHome@Com
Eeek, Annabell! ( Neck-tie parties are very cultured, I'll have you know!)Www@QuestionHome@Com