Something that just popped into my head. do you like it.?

Question:"iron"

I knew he had not been right,
I will wait til late at night.
In my dreams colors fade,
then seem to decay.

All the truth is full of lies,
I'll find a way to die.
I don't want to feel despair,
in fact I just don't care.

Flowers black like my blood,
just a matter til I flood.
Nothing of it is the truth,
there's falsehood in your soul.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: "iron"

I knew he had not been right,
I will wait til late at night.
In my dreams colors fade,
then seem to decay.

All the truth is full of lies,
I'll find a way to die.
I don't want to feel despair,
in fact I just don't care.

Flowers black like my blood,
just a matter til I flood.
Nothing of it is the truth,
there's falsehood in your soul.

Speaking of black blood, me and my friend at school, we came up with an awesome idea. (not that we're going to do it) But, you take black food coloring in a needle and put it in your veins, and then you cut yourself, and you bleed black. That would be sooo awesome.

Anyway, i really liked it.

its "ok"

Like isn't the right word. It is very dark but that is your style. It makes me think though. Sometimes that is enough.

its good it just needs somthin more

it sounds okay but a little gory try to make it a little less depressing

All the truth is full of lies? How can it be truth? This needs a qualifier. Just a matter til I flood? To me, a forced rhyme plus flood doesn't seem like a good word choice. Isn't falsehood more singular? Maybe try falseness.
Some editing will make this dark poem stand out, and you know I am not a big fan of dark. lol

it was all right i guess just needs something else

I agree with everyone else...it feels like it is lacking something, but overall, very good

I think it sounds ok like it is. without going into the singular, plural. It is written the way the writer feels at the time. His feelings my not be in proper form, it is for your interpretation and enjoyment as is. Some enjoy, some don't.

As a note to Silent Anger, Anything inside your veins is sterile, food coloring isn't, it might be a health hazard to do as you were thinking.