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Question:the butch bike messenger

she's a butch bike messenger
with mosquito bite ti ts
with an aluminum light
ten speed bike
and denim cut capris
you walk around with a
macho swagger
denim vest shows off
your tattoo dagger
i know the normal
world has left you behind
but in the messenger world
you are around your kind
to work the streets in
this big big city
i need some weed
will you make a
delivery?

silent butt deadly,

frank

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: the butch bike messenger

she's a butch bike messenger
with mosquito bite ti ts
with an aluminum light
ten speed bike
and denim cut capris
you walk around with a
macho swagger
denim vest shows off
your tattoo dagger
i know the normal
world has left you behind
but in the messenger world
you are around your kind
to work the streets in
this big big city
i need some weed
will you make a
delivery?

silent butt deadly,

frank

Not your usual type of genre, but...strangely I'm laughing!
Good 'un.

ita ita

Weed is cliche. See you try to clean up your act and you become cliched. Go figure.

Why so angry? Even with the simplest remark your writing makes it sound angry. The message contained within is overcast with your anger, tone it down a little so people can see more. I see flashes but your have work to do for me to read more.