Color Poem, Black....any good???

Question:BLACK
Erin Marie Young
Color Poem

The dark of night
Fading day.
Screaming out in pain
It blares terror.
Can you hear?
Of course you can't.
It is silenced
by the asylum walls.
Emo paradise
cold, dark heart.
The feeling is captured
Imprisoned by stereotype.
But it is more than this
more than steady hate.
It feels more
stand for more
than you all seem to think.
Its beautiful
And spiritual.
It captures all
It feels all.
But you cannot see
Full potential is taken
Robbed of its freedom
To be what it truly is and must be.
The Rede says:
Fairly take and fairly give,
But what have you given,
To that which you take so much from?

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: BLACK
Erin Marie Young
Color Poem

The dark of night
Fading day.
Screaming out in pain
It blares terror.
Can you hear?
Of course you can't.
It is silenced
by the asylum walls.
Emo paradise
cold, dark heart.
The feeling is captured
Imprisoned by stereotype.
But it is more than this
more than steady hate.
It feels more
stand for more
than you all seem to think.
Its beautiful
And spiritual.
It captures all
It feels all.
But you cannot see
Full potential is taken
Robbed of its freedom
To be what it truly is and must be.
The Rede says:
Fairly take and fairly give,
But what have you given,
To that which you take so much from?

When we can become the most expressive, we seem to be the most imprisioned...a dichotomy I was never truly-fully-concious of till I read this poem....A beatiful terror opens our eyes to the freedom we are all imprisioned in. But what is terror, really?? See the poem above..not quite as good or evil that one would think it is...and we are all the more enlightened for reading such...and to that I thank the author...

When you said Emo paradise it thru me off.... Try saying emotional paradise.... I think it sounds better.

i agree with the dude above
when you say emo paradise, stereotypes get involved and it makes it much more shallow

i dont like sad poems but damn this is good