Please rate my poem from 10!! and tell if i need to improve or not n if i have t

Question:In the morning i woke up
and drank milk from the cup
after having my bath
sat to do some math
5 min passed, i'm bored
in a glass some pepsi i poured
spent lotsa time drinking
and in my thoughts sinking
In noon i had my lunch
alond with a chocolate munch
went to play in eve at 5:30
came back all dirty
had bath another time
and now here finding rhyme
this is how i spend my summer day
with lotsa time wasted away!

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: In the morning i woke up
and drank milk from the cup
after having my bath
sat to do some math
5 min passed, i'm bored
in a glass some pepsi i poured
spent lotsa time drinking
and in my thoughts sinking
In noon i had my lunch
alond with a chocolate munch
went to play in eve at 5:30
came back all dirty
had bath another time
and now here finding rhyme
this is how i spend my summer day
with lotsa time wasted away!

Okay, keeping in mind that you're 13 and from India:

1) Avoid inverting word order to preserve a rhyme. Don't force it.

2) A REAL poem will be a metaphor to express a thought or feeling that is hard to put in prose.

2/10

i'm sry, it'snot deep at all. It's just like, a schedual. The rhyming seemed forced and it had no emotion. It kinda sounded lame. Try writing about something deeper & prettier.

when people say write your story they dont acully mean write what you did today, any way i give it a 5/10 it could use more emotion

You need to work on it. Just keep writing and getting to a rhythm for your poems.