Im 13 i have a poem rate please =)?

Question:Love poem

I love the way
Your hair covers your eyes
I love the way
Your smile makes me sigh
I love the way
Your blues eyes smile
And the way
That I stare into them for a while

I hate the way
Your making me wait
I hate the way
We arent fate
I hate the way
im torn limb from limb
And the way
That ill never be him

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Love poem

I love the way
Your hair covers your eyes
I love the way
Your smile makes me sigh
I love the way
Your blues eyes smile
And the way
That I stare into them for a while

I hate the way
Your making me wait
I hate the way
We arent fate
I hate the way
im torn limb from limb
And the way
That ill never be him

I really like it! I think you should try free verse because some of the rhym,es seem way forced..... free verse is where you try and make it rythmatic instead of just having it rhyme.... some parts can still rhyme but, not always on purpose, it's just more fun and creative!

aaawwwwwwwwww... soo cute!

love it. really cute.

its ok, sssooooooooooooo who do you like that you'd write this poem for "that person"

Like it :)

I would just melt if someone gave me that poem.... : )

As a pubilshed writed, I think you need to go deeper, it's good don't get me wrong. Peotry is about getting soulful and making your emotions be felt through your reader. Keep up the good work, I'm also 13

it was sweet and cute....
but you want me to rate it as a poem .. i would give you a 7.

but what are you trying to say ?
do you like her? or not?

what i liked about it was that it came from the heart, you meant what you said.. keep it that way

aww
its so sweet
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