Critique please;; =)?

Question:I want to enter a poetry contest I entered about.. four years ago, where my poem was published. I want to see if I could do it again for the older ages contest.

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Spiraling dust hits the stage
as lights like the sun warm each cheek
Love and practice show seek attention
as every talent's tested this thundrous night.
The graceful dancer takes first prize,
Her swept bang unable to hide her smile.
Comedy's trilogy beats the house
and the drummer slams as third place is awarded.
Every face in the audience wants this feeling
of pride, of joy from every bead of sweat.
Even I, though I...
I am unable to seek it here.
Given a song I will fly to it
hide in tree stumps missing their inner soul,
Beauty and grace hit the starlight
as I camp in my backyard
Oh, how I wish I could display this love,
this talent beating in my soul.
As our harmony is only heard in heart
love of nature, art of sky,
busted knee, messy hair upon my shoulders
Never possible to show I rock climb

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: I want to enter a poetry contest I entered about.. four years ago, where my poem was published. I want to see if I could do it again for the older ages contest.

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Spiraling dust hits the stage
as lights like the sun warm each cheek
Love and practice show seek attention
as every talent's tested this thundrous night.
The graceful dancer takes first prize,
Her swept bang unable to hide her smile.
Comedy's trilogy beats the house
and the drummer slams as third place is awarded.
Every face in the audience wants this feeling
of pride, of joy from every bead of sweat.
Even I, though I...
I am unable to seek it here.
Given a song I will fly to it
hide in tree stumps missing their inner soul,
Beauty and grace hit the starlight
as I camp in my backyard
Oh, how I wish I could display this love,
this talent beating in my soul.
As our harmony is only heard in heart
love of nature, art of sky,
busted knee, messy hair upon my shoulders
Never possible to show I rock climb

I must say that I love this, and I love your style. I agree, see the winners of the contest in the past and it can show you if you are close to what they are looking for. My only thing on this is line 14. It throws me off...and I don't really understand what you are tyring to say. Othere than that I loved this.

Just wondering... what contest is this. The best way to see if your cut out for it, is to look it up online and see past winners and see if your any good compared to those...

That was really good. I love the word choice. You paint a picture with your words. It is amazing. You could definitely win that contest! Keep writing those fantabulous poems!