Just a small poem, what do you think?

Question:Shady clouds break out
the white lit sky is hid away,
rail showers fall from heaven
as the the eeriness turns to grey,
shuddering sounds are heard
the darkness breaths a sigh
as lightening bolts are received
by the blink of an eye.

Best Answer - Chosen by Asker: Shady clouds break out
the white lit sky is hid away,
rail showers fall from heaven
as the the eeriness turns to grey,
shuddering sounds are heard
the darkness breaths a sigh
as lightening bolts are received
by the blink of an eye.

i like it,
made me smile lol
will you answer mine
the name of a story in a story

pretty nice, but the end made me laugh lol :P . blink of an eye, you should try something different at the end

not bad..:P

i like it. how bout By the Blink of an Eye